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September 3rd, 2006
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Beta Call
Crossposted to x_slash

I'm looking for betas again for my current WIP. Folks who read this journal have come through for me before and been wonderful betas, who have greatly improved the stories. I'm grateful for that help and I thought I'd try again now.

My fiction is X-Men movieverse and I'm currently writing an X1-based series. For readers of my previous fiction, it follows "What's Past is Prologue" and continues the story of what happens to the X-Men after Charles Xavier's death. There will be intersecting plots with a common theme. In addition to the movie characters, there are some comics characters - including Northstar and Havok - and some original characters.

The series is slash, but there are heterosexual couples as well. The main pairings are Scott/Logan, Jean-Paul/OMC, and Jean/OMC.

I mostly write story series, with each story being from 1500-4000 words. My series have ranged in length from 4 stories to 18 and from 12,000 words to 55,000 words. I've written about 5,000 words so far in this one and I expect it will be about 10 stories and 25,000 words when done.

I like process betas, who will read stories as they are written and answer questions like "What do you think happens next?" as well as do the more conventional proofreading and copy editing. This helps me to see whether my foreshadowing is too heavy-handed, too subtle, or just right. I ask questions about how the beta is reacting to the story and what s/he'd like to see happen or done differently. I don't always take that advice but I profit from it. I'm looking for the kind of impact the stories have on a few readers, so I like to have multiple betas. It's not required that you have read my previous stories.

I'm including a snippet from the current WIP, to give a sense of what you'd be getting into if you beta for me. If you are interested in beta'ing, comment here or write to me. Thanks in advance for your attention and consideration.



Logan was the first to leave the meeting. He walked quickly out the French doors in what he still thought of as Xavier’s office, and strode up the hill. He realized someone was walking right behind him, knew who it was from his scent, but he didn’t acknowledge his presence until the other man spoke.

“How long has that been going on?” Alex asked.

Logan continued to walk. “What?”

“This shit about not getting paid for the work.”

“Six months. Didn’t Cyclops tell you about it when you signed up?”

“Yeah, he told me. I thought it would be over by now, though.”

“They pay you much at your last place?” Logan had stopped and turned to face Alex, ironic smirk on his face.

“You wouldn’t sneer about it if you knew what it’s like being inside.”

“Guess what? I do know, and I still sneer.”

Neither of them said anything for a minute.

“What’s with this codename shit? I’m supposed to choose one?”

Logan shrugged. “You don’t have to. Most do. Up to you.”

“The whole thing’s so cheesy. Iceman, Northstar, Storm, Shadowcat. Where do they get this shit? How’d you ever come up with Wolverine?”

“I don’t know. I had it a long time. Before the X-Men.”

“What animal do you think I should be?” Logan didn’t answer. He turned and started to walk further up the hill, but stopped when Alex spoke again. “Hey, I hear you’re my brother’s bitch.”

It happened so fast Alex didn’t get a chance to defend himself. Logan had pushed him up against a tree, Alex’s body immobilized by the weight and the force of
the adamantium in him, unable to move enough to use his powers. Claws sprang out of Logan’s hand and pierced Alex’s right shoulder, extending into the tree. He gasped with the pain.

“Stop your yowling. It’s just a flesh wound.” Logan’s face was right up against his. “I could kill you right here, you know. I’m not gonna – not this time. Not unless you use your powers on me when I let you go.”

“Let me go now! Or at least take those fucking claws out. It hurts like hell.”

“A little pain is good for you. Focuses the mind.” He glared at him. “Focus your mind on this, boy. What goes on between your brother and me ain’t none of your
business. Don’t like it? Don’t think about it. Don’t talk about it. But if you do think about it – if you do talk about it – it’s gonna be with respect. You got that?”

Alex didn’t answer at first. Logan twisted his left hand a little, intensifying the shooting pains in Alex’s shoulder. Alex nodded.

Logan continued. “Cyclops thinks you’ve got potential. Me, I’m not impressed. I guess we’ll see over time who’s right. But if you’re here to cause trouble, pack your bags and leave now. I told Scott when he said he wanted to offer you a spot on the team that you could wreak havoc with the X-Men. I’m not gonna let you do that.”

Logan stepped back and released his hold on Alex, watching to see if he’d try to attack. They looked at each other warily, but nothing happened. He pulled the claws out of Alex’s shoulder but left them extended, blood dripping from them, brandishing them in front of the younger man’s face. Alex clutched his wounded shoulder, saying nothing. They looked at each other for a minute, then Logan turned and strode back to the mansion. He could feel Alex watching him the whole way.

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From:vision_m
Date:September 4th, 2006 01:07 am (UTC)
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Not sure if you remember me previously beta'd from Summers in a Sea of Glory. I haven't been around much since started working again but felt the urge to check out your LJ which I have finally just decided to get an account so I won't be just some anonymous reader again. I'm actually intrigued by this story especially waiting to see the dynamic between Scott/Logan/Alex and how the deal with the aftermath of joining force with the government and tackling their own personal bullshit.

I have some downtime now since changing shifts at work and would be willing to help out once again as a beta reader.

I believe you have my yahoo address.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 02:55 am (UTC)
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I'd love to have you beta again! This snippet is from the second story in the series. I'll send the first one, with questions, to your email address. You know the drill - provide feedback, corrections and answers to questions and you get another story :-).
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From:thdancingferret
Date:September 4th, 2006 05:22 am (UTC)
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Well, life is a jumble but reading and betaing fic certainly helps to focus the mind elsewhere. My grammar and punctuation skills are adequate, but I do tend to look more at characterization, plot flow, that sort of thing. If you think that would be helpful, I'd be more than willing to give it a go.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 12:54 pm (UTC)
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I'd be glad of your help. Don't feel you have to continue if life gets too crazy - I generally have a few. I'll send you the first story via email.
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From:thdancingferret
Date:September 5th, 2006 02:20 am (UTC)
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It's a welcome distraction, so barring RL becoming *extremely* crazy, it shouldn't put me off too much. Received and reviewing, thank you ;)
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From:talktooloose
Date:September 4th, 2006 01:11 pm (UTC)
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"Hear that, Alex? HAVOC! You could wreak HAVOC!"
"What? You saying I reek?"
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 01:16 pm (UTC)
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LOL! Hey, do you say "reek" for "wreak"? I say "wreck" for "wreak".

You say wreak and I say wreak - let's call the whole thing off.
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From:talktooloose
Date:September 4th, 2006 02:31 pm (UTC)
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I've heard "reck" for "wreak", but I say "reek" for "wreak".

You let slip your dogs, I'll let slip mine.

Hope you and yours are well. I'm borrowing a laptop and heading to the park to write DOB now. I would love to have fought my way through to the end of chapter 5 by the weekend.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 05:40 pm (UTC)
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I'm looking forward to the next chapter! And I love writing in a park. Have fun.
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From:talktooloose
Date:September 4th, 2006 06:39 pm (UTC)
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Yay! Good writing done. The story is 5,400 words now and Bobby is JUST ARRIVING AT THE MANSION!!!

The park was great. I should have brought the dog but then I would have had to watch him the whole time so it was probably wise to leave him behind.

Now, off to bed with a book for reading and a nap then I'm off to pick up a video for tonight. Good last day of vacation even if the weather sucks.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 07:07 pm (UTC)
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Bobby is JUST ARRIVING AT THE MANSION!!!
I never doubted it for a minute :-). Okay, I did.

I've been writing, too, and making progress in between laundry and assorted kid stuff. Much excitement here, since tomorrow is the first day of school.

Sorry the weather is lousy there. (I say "lousy" instead of "sucks" because I think lice are a Bad Thing and oral sex is a Good Thing). It's nice here - not too hot.
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From:talktooloose
Date:September 4th, 2006 08:53 pm (UTC)
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The lowly louse's mother loves it, too.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 08:59 pm (UTC)
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Perhaps, but speaking as a mother who has picked nits out of her kids' hair and dreaded the call from the school that there's an outbreak, I tend to think of lice as a plague.
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From:mofic
Date:September 4th, 2006 03:32 pm (UTC)

Re: Argh...

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Thanks for this. Are you saying you're interested in beta-ing? If so, let me know. If not, this is still helpful and I'll keep it and take your comments under advisement. I'm going to delete them from my journal, though, because I don't like to revise, process, etc. on lj.
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From:lizarazu
Date:September 5th, 2006 12:25 am (UTC)
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Hi, I just wanted to drop in and say that I love the snippet. Therefore, I would like to encourage all your lovely betas to work fast (although it's not my place to rush anyone, just voicing my enthusiasm). I'm excited to see you picking up where you left off the X1 series, with Alex now in the picture. I'm very, very curious to see what comes out of it. Knowing you, something excellent.
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From:mofic
Date:September 5th, 2006 12:53 pm (UTC)
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Thanks! I'm glad you like it.

IME it's the author who holds things up, not the betas. Anyway, I've got a few betas and have been through a couple of rounds on the first story and one on the second. I've got the third in my head, so I just need to find time to key it in. It's coming along...
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